We’re supposed to be writing a prose poem for Writing 201. After reading several examples, this is my first attempt; however, I don’t even know if I’m on the right track. Comments, suggestions, and helpful criticism are greatly appreciated!
Update: Having left my original post up for several hours, I received several positive reviews and no real suggestions other than to remove the fingers – from the piece, not from me. I’m not that bad . . . at least, I don’t think I am . . . but you’d tell me, right?
Anyway, I’m going to go ahead and remove the password protection and share this with the world. Or, at the very least, the forty or so people who regularly visit.
Morning
With cold fingers I hold onto my coffee, wordlessly hoping for another school closing. Nope. Pull on the hat, coat and gloves. Head out the door to see the car frozen over. No ice remover, no scraper, just the vents put on overload. Listen to How Stuff Works; I wonder how long it will take. Twenty-one minutes – at least the motor turned over! Drive on to work.
Warm(er) fingers turn the key in the lock; kids are already waiting like a flock of . . . sheep? geese? Oh great. The clocks are all off. Again. I really need more coffee – strike that – I need the whole pot. Okay, who forgot to throw out the grounds? Come on, people! I’m not the only one around here! How much longer? Ten minutes? I guess that’ll work.

I love the irritable morning tone of voice; short, sharp sentences. Nice one!
Thank you for sharing.
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.
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Poor you with all that coldness; you did a good job creating that visual shivering cold.
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Technically, today was a snow day; I had to write my imagined response. Thanks for reading.
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Here is to sunshine.
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Great piece of prose poetry. And, I love the design of your blog/site!
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Thanks! I created it last summer as part of Blogging 101.
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Good to know. I’m planning to take that up at some point. Looks like there will be great stuff to learn.
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Yes! I can really feel what it must be like on a morning like that. A great prose poem.
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I think you’re on the right track with your prose prose. I like beginning both paragraphs with “fingers” and ending both “work.” And “coffee” through out. Lots of “o”s in the first paragraph and “k”s in create good sounds, especially when I read your poem aloud. I think your prose poem definitely works. 🙂
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Thanks; I must say it’s grown on me; I like it better now than I did when I first wrote it.
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P.S. I meant prose poem instead of prose prose. Also “k”s in the second paragraph. I’ve been snowed in too long and my mind is groggy.
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I know the feeling; they’ve predicted more for our area tonight into tomorrow morning. General consensus is that we’ve had it with winter.
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